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Critique 2, please

Postby Cutterone on 04/30/2016, 8:15 pm

All,

Here is another shot I've been working on for the same short film. It's only a 2sec. shot, but it's my first test with Jet Strike. Let me know where it can be improved.

https://vimeo.com/164864246

Just a couple of notes.

I added some animation to the ailerons and elevators. It doesn't show well in such a short clip, but it's there. I used wiggle (expression) for the animation on those parts.

I was able to edit the graphics on the planes using the technique Andrew K. showed in the flight control video.

I do have Ray-tracing on and that slows down renter times A LOT!!! (holy crap!)

Still working on getting a more realistic animation to the camera and plane movements.

Any tips/thoughts/suggestions/advice?

Thanks!
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Re: Critique 2, please

Postby JPT7505 on 05/1/2016, 7:48 am

Aesthetically it looks very nice but something about it looks artificial. Something with the movement, either the cam or the jets themselves. Hard to tell with a short clip.
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Re: Critique 2, please

Postby Cutterone on 05/1/2016, 8:05 am

JPT7505 wrote:Aesthetically it looks very nice but something about it looks artificial. Something with the movement, either the cam or the jets themselves. Hard to tell with a short clip.


Thanks JPT, that's exactly what I was thinking too. The movement seems "off" somehow, and like you said, I'm having a hard time determining if it's the cam or the jets themselves that don't seem "fluid" enough, if you know what I mean.
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Re: Critique 2, please

Postby CaptainWolf on 05/9/2016, 6:29 pm

Jets and color correction look great, I think the problem is with the camera movement, what I think you should do is to move the keyframes a bit farther apart move the camera more at each end and apply the easy ease option to both keyframes. I think that'll fix it
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Re: Critique 2, please

Postby Cutterone on 05/25/2016, 6:54 am

CaptainWolf wrote:Jets and color correction look great, I think the problem is with the camera movement, what I think you should do is to move the keyframes a bit farther apart move the camera more at each end and apply the easy ease option to both keyframes. I think that'll fix it


Thanks CaptainWolf, I'll definitely give those tweaks a try. I'll post a revised shot to show how it came out.
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